Starter quiz
- Which of these features would not be included in the conclusion of our journalistic report?
- looking to the future
- the most up-to-date information
- summary of the events ✓
- the 'official' perspective
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- What features of a conclusion are shown in this sentence? 'Margaret Blackwood, a council spokesperson, said that the council would be happy to help rebuild the zoo in the future.'
- giving the 'official' position ✓
- giving the most up-to-date information about the event
- looking to the future ✓
- reported speech ✓
- direct speech
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- What features of a conclusion are shown in this sentence? '"We know these events are upsetting," she added, "but the right decision was made."'
- giving the 'official' position ✓
- giving the most up-to-date information about the event
- reported speech
- looking to the future
- direct speech ✓
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- Which example below uses direct speech correctly?
- Mrs Farrelly said, "She came to the zoo just as they were about to shoot."
- Mrs Farrelly said that she came to the zoo just as they were about to shoot.
- Mrs Farrelly said, "I came to the zoo just as they were about to shoot." ✓
- Mrs Farrelly said, "I came to the zoo just as they were about to shoot?"
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- Which example below punctuates direct speech correctly?
- "I understand their actions," she added "but I'm still upset."
- "I understand their actions," she added, "but I'm still upset." ✓
- "I understand their actions," she added, "but I'm still upset"
- "I understand their actions" she added, "but I'm still upset"
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- Jun says, "Completing our first draft is the end of the writing process." Which response is correct?
- "Yes - it's finished!"
- "No - publishing is the next step!"
- "No - we need to edit and improve our work!" ✓
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Exit quiz
- Put these steps of the writing process in order.
- 1⇔generate ideas
- 2⇔plan our writing
- 3⇔write our first draft
- 4⇔edit and improve the draft
- 5⇔publish or present our work
- Which of these are true of editing and improving work?
- Only bad work needs editing.
- Editing can help make good work great. ✓
- Editing can help us correct mistakes. ✓
- Editing can help us find opportunities to improve our work. ✓
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- Which sentence has commas used correctly?
- Andy Mayo, an air raid warden was present at the zoo.
- Andy Mayo, an air raid warden was present, at the zoo.
- Andy Mayo, an air raid warden, was present, at the zoo.
- Andy Mayo, an air raid warden, was present at the zoo. ✓
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- Which cohesive device can be seen in this sentence? 'The zoo, which now has few animals remaining, suffered severe damage in the raid.'
- adverbial complex sentence
- relative complex sentence ✓
- non-finite (-ing) complex sentence
- compound sentence
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- What features in this passage show the informality we can use in some direct speech? '“And I still can’t believe it’s happened...” he said.'
- contractions ✓
- ellipsis to show a thought trailing off ✓
- informal sentence opener ✓
- serious, factual language
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- Which option below shows the most formal tone?
- It is understood that all remaining animals have been secured. ✓
- We understand that all the animals left have been secured.
- I have been told that all remaining animals have been secured.
- It looks like all the remaining animals are in their cages.
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Lesson Details
Key learning points
- Editing is a critical part of the writing process. A growth mindset helps us benefit most from editing.
- Writing is most successful when editing is used to rethink, rephrase and reconsider first ideas.
- Editing is most successful when it is chunked by punctuation, sentence structure, vocabulary and cohesive devices.
- We can connect ideas in a range of different ways, using different cohesive devices - there is rarely only one way.
- We use a less formal tone when quoting real people's speech; we use a formal tone elsewhere in our text.
Common misconception
Pupils may have all characters using the same language in direct speech.
Encourage pupils to think about the 'voice' of each character - how might they speak?
Keywords
Growth mindset - a desire to keep developing any skill set
Text cohesion - how a text flows to maintain the interest of the reader and achieve text purpose
Cohesive devices - language structures that develop text cohesion
Formal tone - the effect created by using serious, factual language
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