Starter quiz
- How do you use a plan to write part of a narrative?
- copy it out word for word
- use the notes to form a range of full sentences ✓
- follow the sequence of events
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- What is a fronted adverbial?
- a word used to describe a verb
- a sentence starter ✓
- a conjunction
- a type of subordinate clause
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- What are the different sentence types that you can use in your writing?
- complex ✓
- fronted adverbial
- simple ✓
- subordinate clause
- compound ✓
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- Put the four key moments of the climax in chronological order.
- 1⇔One night, some whales become stranded on a beach.
- 2⇔Members of the tribe arrive to try to save the whales, but they are not able to.
- 3⇔The villagers start to leave the beach.
- 4⇔Paikea communicates with the lead whale and they start moving.
- What is an adverbial complex sentence?
- a sentence formed of two main clauses
- a sentence formed of one main clause and an adverbial subordinate clause ✓
- a sentence formed of two main clauses and a co-ordinating conjunction
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- Which of the following is an example of 'show-not-tell' language?
- The villagers were terrified.
- The villagers ran towards the whales.
- Their eyes widened in fear and their jaws dropped. ✓
- The villagers tried to help the whales.
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Exit quiz
- True or false? We should use a range of sentence types (like simple, compound and complex) in our writing.
- True ✓
- False
- Match the sentence type to its example.
- simple⇔The villagers ran frantically towards the shore. ✓
- compound⇔There was an urgent cry and the villagers looked up in shock. ✓
- complex⇔As she reached the shore, the helpless whales broke her heart. ✓
- What linguistic device is this an example of? 'How could she just watch these symbols of her heritage ebb away?'
- metaphor
- rhetorical question ✓
- direct speech
- show-not-tell language
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- Complete the following sentence with an appropriate fronted adverbial: '__________ an urgent, sudden cry from the beach interrupted the ocean’s rhythmic motion.'
- Happily,
- In the dead of night, ✓
- In addition,
- Quietly,
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- Which of the following uses 'show-not-tell' language to describe how the villagers felt when they saw the stranded whales?
- The villagers ran frantically towards the sea.
- The villagers ran frantically towards the sea with eyes widened in alarm. ✓
- ''We're really scared!'' exclaimed the villagers.
- The villagers were scared.
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- Select all that apply to complete this sentence: 'When writing, we should...'
- only showcase one type of sentence.
- plan and say each sentence before we write it. ✓
- make edits and improvements if needed. ✓
- copy our plan exactly, word-for-word.
- read back our sentences out loud to check they make sense. ✓
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Lesson Details
Key learning points
- This emotive scene is written over two paragraphs and it is important to demonstrate a change in atmosphere across them.
- Using a range of sentence types (simple, compound and complex) improves text flow and cohesion.
- Precise and ambitious vocabulary, including 'show-not-tell' language, is used to convey an emotive atmosphere.
- ‘Show-not-tell’ shows a character’s feelings with description of their actions, body language and facial expressions.
- Oral rehearsal before writing helps to structure grammatically correct sentences and check for sense.
Common misconception
Internal thoughts are rhetorical questions only.
Internal thoughts can be questions and statements. Ensure pupils use their plans with ideas for Paikea's internal thoughts and model how to write these in the third person.
Keywords
Emotive - evoking intense feelings or emotions
Ambitious vocabulary - high-level language in writing that meets the text purpose
Cohesion - how a text flows in order to maintain the interest of the reader and achieve the purpose
'show-not-tell' - shows a character’s feelings by describing their actions, body language and facial expressions
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